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All I knew was the sound of your voice
All I knew was the feel of your touch
All I knew was the cold in your eyes
As all I knew fell apart

All I knew was taken away
All I knew was you're gone
All I knew was the broken heart
As my Everything, my All left for her
©2008-2009 ~Kazulallan
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Author's Comments

so there's kind of two 'stories' behind this poem. 1) it's describing the way i felt when my one boyfriend left.

2)i wrote this after reading some of the ones written by my friend F-CKTHEDRAMA---x. she's really good and her writing's inspiring. i'd recommend you check it out. but that's just my personal opinion.

Anyhow, as usual, comment if you like, comment if you don't.... (just don't swear if you don't, plz, ok?) i like knowing if others like my writing.

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=Bwarch Jul 7, 2008, 12:04:19 PM
Short and sweet, just the way most people like. Its really good in my opinion.

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Always striving to improve and always studying the mysteries of the universe around us with curiosity.

Proud Shadow Legion member. Proud Atheist.

I'm a very, very lazy writer though...
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~Kazulallan Jul 7, 2008, 2:52:53 PM
thank you. i appreciate that. my shorter ones tend to be... well not as good. it's nice to hear otherwise!

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Why So Serious? Screw Sanity, Psychotics Are the Lucky ones!
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*AHeartsWhispers Jul 15, 2008, 9:55:42 AM
:frail: This is the why, the wherefore, the what, and the therefore of a heart that is now ice. It is exactly the feelings expressed as the only time I allowed someone enter my heart other than my dance, tore it apart and used me for who I was, and it is why I am now ice. Well done!

Vic :frail:

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Lies are whispers often uttered in the dark.
Truth are the words that hit the heart in
Daylight stark.
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~Kazulallan Jul 15, 2008, 7:46:29 PM
Well spoken, friend, and thank you so much for your comment! It is really appreciated to get positive feedback, although I am sorry you have to relate so directly to my words.

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Why So Serious? Screw Sanity, Psychotics Are the Lucky ones!
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*AHeartsWhispers Jul 16, 2008, 2:27:13 PM
:floating: I have chosen dance as my love now. So please do not feel sorry for me. I am happy when I am in my element. Thank you for your compliment on my words. It is greatly appreciated! :floating:

Vic :floating:

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Lies are whispers often uttered in the dark.
Truth are the words that hit the heart in
Daylight stark.
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~Kazulallan Jul 16, 2008, 3:18:45 PM
I'm glad to hear all that. Dance really does do wonders, doesn't it?

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Why So Serious? Screw Sanity, Psychotics Are the Lucky ones!
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*AHeartsWhispers Jul 20, 2008, 8:31:41 AM
:floating:Indeed, in fact I just finished having a ballet bar placed up for my friend to do therapy with. She is doing marvelously in her recovery and the bar being there seems to be an inspiration for her to return as quickly as she can. :floating:So today I am floating on the clouds of joy and the anticipation of seeing her, and it is like magic truly, fly across the floor. :floating: I am so waiting for that! :floating:

Vic

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Lies are whispers often uttered in the dark.
Truth are the words that hit the heart in
Daylight stark.
:iconkazulallan:
~Kazulallan Aug 9, 2008, 1:07:44 PM
That sounds great! I do hope that everything turns out well for her.

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Why So Serious? Screw Sanity, Psychotics Are the Lucky ones!
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